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Two Kids From Verona


The original Romeo & Juliet is 25,948 words….good stuff, but does it really need to be that long?  Here’s my 141 word, Plotsicle version that hits the high points.  Linked to One Stop Poetry and Big Tent Poetry.

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Poor Romeo and Juliet

A Montague and Capulet

Their families in an awful feud

Veronan twits with attitude


Two teeny-boppers fall in love

But fate about to give a shove

On balcony defies her pa

“Where for art thou,”… blah, blah, blah


Married by a cunning friar

Jules and padre co-conspire

But, there’s a little problem, man

See, Romeo’s not told the plan


So, when young Julie fakes her death

Beau, Romeo can’t catch his breath

He drinks some poison at her side

Then exits center stage by bride


When Julie wakes to see him die

She knows she must do more than cry

Our girl’s plan has got some swagger:

Locate chest and insert dagger


A tragic tale of plans askew

The moral here is nothing new

Love can be so iridescent

But a mess when prepubescent

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  1. April 26, 2011 at 7:54 PM

    LOL….and still…hilarious a great start to the day better than coffee! Thankyou!

    • April 26, 2011 at 8:29 PM

      Thanks…and good morning! Now get that coffee. Vb

  2. April 26, 2011 at 8:09 PM

    ha. this was a fun poetic romp…thanks for the grins…

  3. April 26, 2011 at 8:11 PM

    “Locate chest and insert dagger” Enjoyed your poem very much. Witty and well crafted.

  4. April 26, 2011 at 8:12 PM

    I honestly laughed out loud.

  5. April 26, 2011 at 8:21 PM

    Much easier to understand & just the right bit of humor! Love it:-) Stop in & read Dreaming of You

  6. April 26, 2011 at 8:51 PM

    “Love can be so iridescent… But a mess when prepubescent…”

    This is so true… i love your brilliant version of “Romeo and Juliet!” You made me smile here. 🙂

  7. April 27, 2011 at 1:29 AM

    poor kids. yes if they were older…. 😦

  8. April 27, 2011 at 4:57 AM

    haha .. moral was to plan well and to communicate better 😀

  9. April 27, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    Enjoyed this!

    Here is my one shot:
    diamonte

  10. April 27, 2011 at 2:39 PM

    Wow! The Cliff’s Notes for Romeo and Juliet. Between laughing fits, it dawns on me that you made it into a funny tragedy. It’s an oxymoron.

  11. April 27, 2011 at 5:44 PM

    Well that’s sorted Shakespeare so War and Peace next?

    • April 27, 2011 at 8:06 PM

      Hmmm…might need an extra stanza for that. Vb

  12. April 27, 2011 at 6:28 PM

    you got a real belly laugh outta me on otherwise dreary day 🙂 and I stand humbled at your rhyming abilities 🙂

    Monty / bummy

  13. April 27, 2011 at 6:58 PM

    fabulous fun…you tie Baz’s Romeo + Juliet for a fresh take at the Bard…well played ~

  14. KB
    April 27, 2011 at 9:49 PM

    Enjoyed your poem!

  15. April 27, 2011 at 11:36 PM

    Oh goodness! Kids in high school need to read this; it’d make their slog through the play much easier.

  16. earlybird
    April 28, 2011 at 1:41 AM

    Love this! I always thought it could be cut down to the essential action! 😉

  17. April 28, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    So, THAT’s what the story is about, never watched it all the way through.

    Not such a happy ending, eh?

    But I think your version is better than any other I’d read.

  18. April 29, 2011 at 10:47 AM

    You managed to turn the ultimate tragedy into quite a comedy. Well done!

  19. b_y
    April 29, 2011 at 11:58 AM

    snirkle.

    (never did like those kids. drama, drama, drama)

  20. April 29, 2011 at 2:19 PM

    Brilliantly funny and clever! I love this piece!!

  21. April 29, 2011 at 2:52 PM

    I love this, it is brilliant!

    Pamela

  22. April 30, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    LOL! Love these rhyming, humorous, summaries of the classics! I teach first grade now…but could teach 7-9 grade English…and if I ever do…I’m so gonna use these (with permission, of course) 🙂

  23. Deb
    April 30, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Fabulous voice! So many great lines!

  24. May 1, 2011 at 1:13 AM

    Nice! Now all you need to do is put it to music, and you’ll have the next West Side Story.

  25. May 1, 2011 at 1:23 PM

    Lots of fun, turning a tragedy into a comedy. Love “Then exits center stage by bride”.

  26. May 2, 2011 at 1:32 AM

    Great fun! Thanks for the laughs.

  27. May 2, 2011 at 12:29 PM

    waiting for next one.

  28. May 3, 2011 at 10:05 AM

    This is fantastic! Witty, but also a well rendered shorten form of the iconic tale!

  29. May 5, 2011 at 7:18 AM

    =)

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